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critique and feedback - the story of austin's butterfly - Ron Berger

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    What would you guys say to teachers
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    if they are not getting high quality work?
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    Could they learn something from this?
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    Or would you say they would learn differently in the classrooms?
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    This is the story called Austin's Butterfly.
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    And it's a true story about a first grade boy, and his name is Austin.
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    And he goes to school, or used to go to school in a town called Boise, Idaho.
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    And in his class in Boise, Idaho, they were studying butterflies and he had to do a project.
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    His job in the first grade was to draw a butterfly.
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    And this is the butterfly that he picked.
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    Austin had to use this photograph as his model,
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    and he had to draw an accurate scientific drawing of this butterfly.
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    This is called a Tiger Swallowtail.
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    Student: I knew it!
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    Can you tell Toby why it's called tiger?
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    Student: Because it kinda has the stripes of a tiger right there.
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    Good. So, here was Austin's job.
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    He was supposed to do a scientific drawing of that butterfly,
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    but remember Austin was only in first grade.
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    And you know what he did?
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    He forgot to look like a scientist carefully.
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    He got his paper and he just started to draw the image of butterfly that he had in his head.
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    And he wasn't looking like a scientist, and so this is what he drew.
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    It's not bad! And it is a butterfly.
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    But does it look exactly like this?
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    Students: No...
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    No, it doesn't yet.
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    It doesn't look exactly like this yet.
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    Luckily, this wasn't the regular school where Austin went.
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    It was an expeditionary learning school just like Presumpscot School.
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    And so they didn't look at this and say, "Good Austin! You're done!"
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    They said, "Austin, good start! Now we can start giving you critiques,
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    so you can do a second draft and make it better."
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    And a third draft and make it better and you can make it much much closer to this.
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    And he was ready to go.
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    All of the first graders in his critique group sat on the floor like you guys are.
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    And they decided to split their advice into two kinds.
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    First, just the shape of the wings.
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    And then when the shape was right, they give him advice about pattern inside the wings.
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    Aulia, what would you say?
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    You could make it much pointier.
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    Good! These wings could be much pointier.
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    Who else would add something?
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    Etak, what would you say?
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    How about the angle?
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    Because, not to be mean about the angle, it's just not exact. So, uh...
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    Okay! Show me! Come up here, Etak!
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    Show me where...what you would like to ask him to do just slightly differently.
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    Uh, like to make it little longer?
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    Longer where? Draw where you would do it.
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    Like right there.
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    Okay, so pull this out longer?
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    Yeah.
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    That's very specific, Etak. Thank you.
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    Jemilla, what would you say?
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    It's like... like...a... triangle?
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    Good. Jemilla, I love that. So you are saying more like a triangle shape. And I agree.
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    Well you know what, those first graders came up with most of those same ideas.
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    And you know what Austin said?
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    He said, "Ok! I will go try. And he went back to his seat. And he drew this!"
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    Wow! Wow~
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    Does this look more like a triangle?
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    Yeah...yeah.
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    Did he go out further like what Etak was suggesting?
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    Yeah...yes.
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    Did he add some jaggedness here, (yes) like Cindy?
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    Did he get rid of that bottom thing?
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    Yes.
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    So he did listen to his friends and he made it better.
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    It's not perfect. Toby, what would you say?
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    I would say don't put those little tail things so pointed in, I would say put them more pointed down.
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    Good! Ok. Ethan, what would you say?
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    I think you should make the wings more like this, not like this.
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    Okay.
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    He listened to his friends, and they said this is really a lot better Austin.
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    That second draft really is better.
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    Maybe he can make a third one.
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    Good! Maybe he can make a third draft.
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    And so he did this draft.
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    That's his third draft.
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    That's his third draft. Hadley, that's just right.
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    Elijah, what do you notice there?
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    One wing is more of a pointed than the other. And that side is a little bit higher than the others.
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    Good.
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    Cobern?
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    Right here, it doesn't have the inside thing still.
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    Ah! Okay! It needs a little bit more that notch.
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    So, do you think maybe he should do a fourth draft?
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    Students: Yeah!
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    Well, that's just what he said.
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    He said, "Shoot! Okay. I got round again, I will go back and do the fourth draft."
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    He listened!
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    He listened! Does it look more even like what Elijah was suggesting?
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    Yes! Yeah!
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    And does it look like coming out a little sharper like Cindy was suggesting?
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    And like Etak was saying, the angle looks a little better.
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    So now Austin was feeling really good.
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    He said, " Am I ready to add some pattern?"
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    And they said, "Okay. Why don't you try adding some of the pattern?"
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    And he did!
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    He's good at it.
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    He's so good.
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    And then they said, "Austin, you are ready for color."
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    Let's look at his last draft.
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    And what do you think? Did it come out really good?
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    Students: Yeah! Yeah!
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    Let me show you where he started, just to give you a quick reminder.
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    And then, what do you think about how much progress he made?
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    Etak, what would you say about his progress?
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    He made a lot of progress.
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    He persevered doing it.
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    Um, his friends were honest with him.
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    What was about the kinds of advice that they gave that allowed him to get better each time?
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    Assahn?
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    Well, they told him what was wrong about it.
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    Did they said it was just wrong or were they more specific than that?
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    They were more specific, but they weren't mean about it.
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    Great!
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    Hadley.
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    He made six drafts.
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    And so is that something that other kids should learn from?
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    What should we learn from that?
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    You can make other drafts if it's not right.
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    Good.
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    So if it's not right, you can keep doing more drafts to make it better.
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    And you just don't use things in your head,
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    you want to use sharp eye.
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    Good! He used the eyes of a scientist.
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    Great.
Titel:
critique and feedback - the story of austin's butterfly - Ron Berger
Beskrivning:

I love the story. The kids' names are so unique and sometimes so exotic that I had to ask my friends for help. It can be difficult when a kid slurs. But, hey, they are still little. My job is do my best to comprehend and I love them.

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